"What are you?" asked the man in surprise.
"I am a genie. I have been trapped in that lamp for so long. Why is it that you are doing all the work yourself? Do you not have children that will do it for you?" the genie asked.
"I'm afraid not. I have three wives, but none of which are able to give me children." the man responded.
The genie thought of a way that he could help the man. He had been trapped for oh so long. It would be nice if he were able to repay the man what freeing him. The genie thought long and hard.
"I have a solution to your problem. I will give you three apples. You must give them to each of your wives and they will be able to give you a child. They have to eat them now though and they must eat every last bite," the genie warned him.
The genie then handed him the apples and disappeared. The man ran back to his house and gave his wives the apples. The first wife ate hers right away. The second wife, however, only ate half of hers. The third wife decided that she wasn't hungry, she didn't eat it until the next day.
Months later, the man had three new children. The first child was perfect. The other two were a bit odd. The child born to the second woman was only half-boy. The third child seemed to be perfect, but little did they know, this child was evil. His mother had consumed the rotten apple.
Many years later, when all the children had grown into men, the third child began to show his true side.One night, he snuck into his father's room and killed his father! He planned to take out the rest of the family next and then the kingdom would be his. He didn't realize that someone had been watching him. His brother, the half-boy, knew that it was finally his time to do something. He jumped on his brother and a fight broke out!
"You can't defeat me!" yelled the evil one, "You are nothing more than a half-boy!"
He did defeat him and everyone in the kingdom was so happy. They decided that the half-boy would become the new full King. He showed everyone that you can be a hero even if nobody else believes you can be.
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Author's note: I based this story on one of the stories in the Persian Fairy Tales Unit called Nim Tanak, or Half-Boy. The original story is about a king whose wives were infertile. He was given apples to give each of them that would help them become fertile, but they had to eat all of the apple. In the story, all but one wife ate all of the apple. The last wife only ate half and she gave birth to the half-boy. The half-boy's sister is taken by a Div and the two "normal" brothers try to save her but are defeated. The half-boy then goes to save the sister and saves his brothers too.
I decided to change the story a bit. I decided that it would be interesting if the apples were eaten all at different stages, so the rotten apple led to an evil son, the whole apple led to a normal son, and the half apple led to the half-son. I also thought it would make a good story if I had the evil brother try to take over the kingdom and decide that he wanted to be the king. He then became the one whom the half-boy had to defeat. I also thought that the half-boy deserved to be king since he did defeat the brother.
Bibliography: Story source: Persian Tales, translated by D.L.R. Lorimer and E.O. Lorimer and illustrated by Hilda Roberts (1919).
Stephanie,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story! I liked connection of eating half the apple leading to a half boy and a rotten apple leading to a evil boy, I thought that was really clever. The only thing I'm still curious about is what happened to the good boy who came from the wife that ate a normal apple. I can't imagine he was too thrilled that his brother would be the one taking over as king!
Stephanie,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story! I liked connection of eating half the apple leading to a half boy and a rotten apple leading to a evil boy, I thought that was really clever. The only thing I'm still curious about is what happened to the good boy who came from the wife that ate a normal apple. I can't imagine he was too thrilled that his brother would be the one taking over as king!
Hey, great story. I read the original myself. I would suggest putting the story more in your words. When I first began to read your post, I did not see any difference from the regular story. I do like the white font color compared to your introduction font color. Like Cooper has said, I am left with many questions about the ending. Keep up the writing. Thanks!
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story! The use of the apple and the different phases of eating them is a great concept. I love how it ties directly into the quality of offspring by each mother. I loved how the half boy is able to save the day while his other brother who was born fine was not even aware of the situation. I really want to read the original story to learn more about the half boy!
I really enjoyed your story as well! It was really interesting, and like the others mentioned, I think your idea to use the apple as a direct correlation between how the children ended up was an excellent literary move. I also thought it was a great idea, liked you mentioned in the author's note, to have the half-boy defeat his own brother. I can't image what kind of inner conflict that must have been between what is morally right/sound. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI was really glad that I chose your storytelling to read this week. I actually came across this story while reading the Persian Fairy Tales unit. I thought it was very interesting, especially since it resembled another story I had read either in the same unit or another Indian unit. I very much enjoyed how you changed the story. I thought that the rotten apple child was a very nice touch. It was very refreshing to read a change in the story. Your addition of the “rotten apple” child killing the father was very different, but a very good variation of the original. You did a great job adding small changes here and there to come up with an entirely new story. It’s amazing what a few changes can make on a story. It was very nice that you kept the half-boy as the hero of this story. Great job!
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